The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees.

The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees.
The maps illustrate an industrial area of Norbiton prior or its developments and future alternations.
overall
, it is obvious that the district is going to be developed commercially,recreationally and residentially on either
side
, east and west.
Moreover
, there will be an extension of roads in the north and the design of a new conjunction in the south. In terms of the east
side
,
although
there is no building in the east part now, a playground will be installed to the north of the
road
.
Also
, a school is going to be located to the right of the playground in a “L” shape. Looking at the western area, not only will the
road
expand through the western part from a roundabout ,but
also
there will be shops and a medical centre to the southwest and southeast of the central conjunction respectively. Regarding the south area, the
road
alongside the south
side
will be diverging by constructing a small circular conjunction.
According to
the north, the river which is running from east to west, near a farmland, will be cut into two parts
due to
the extension of the
road
from the middle toward the north
side
.
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