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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The given table
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 the price of
water
 in 5 different urban areas in Australia.
Overall
, the most expensive
water
 was in Perth,
while
 the cheapest belonged to Melbourne. First of all, the cost of
water
 did not
not
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show any differences between size, up and over 125 KL, in Melbourne and Sydney and amounted
for
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to
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 0.78$ and 0.98$ respectively. Brisbale showed merely
change
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a change
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 in price between
two
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the two
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 sizes and accounted for 0.81$ and 0.84$
perspectively
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respectively
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.
However
, in cities
such
 as Adelaide and
Perth
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Perth,
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 the cost of
water
 up to 125 KL was 0.42$ and
this
 number was noticeably lower than
cost
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the cost
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 for over 125 KL, which accounted for 1.00$ and 1.50$ respectively. The average amount of money
spended
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spent
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 on
water
 per house in Brisbane, Adelaide and Sydney was approximately the same and accounted for around 310$.
This
 average bill for Perth was larger than in previously mentioned cities and amounted to 332$,
whereas
 in Melbourne the average price accounted for 253$ per household.
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