Countries should restrict foreign companies from opening offices and factories in order to protect local businesses. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

It is a fact that domestic
companies
are getting business hit
due to
entry of foreign entities,
hence
there are a lot of people who may argue that
government
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should
banned
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ban
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these entries.
This
essay will outline the reasons why I completely disagree with the notion, as these outside
companies
come up with
latest
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technology for
cost effectiveness
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, as well
ass
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as
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it really helps in
maintain
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maintaining
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a healthy competitive environment.
Firstly
, worldwide leading organizations are operating with efficient technologies and upgraded versions of it. Efficient delivery of
product
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products
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with
economic
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economies
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of scale can be seen
as a result
of that.
For example
,
cost
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the cost
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of production and delivery of electronic products by multinational
companies
are
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has been
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far better than domestic manufacturing units in
past
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the past
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decade.
Therefore
, opening doors for these
companies
could be seen as really
add
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adding
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values
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value
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to local consumers.
Secondly
, a sound market
get
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judge
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by
it's
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its
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cometitiveness
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competitiveness
, and there should be
less restriction
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fewer restrictions
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.
This
is really important from
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a customer
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customer
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customer's
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point of view as they should be allowed to choose
their
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them
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require
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product
with
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at
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a comparitive
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comparitive
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competitive
comparative
rate, whilst consumer power is less in
absence
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of it.
For instance
, Middle East countries have strong monopoly business structure
due to
which people
has
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no choice but
buy
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to buy
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the product
which
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apply
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that
provider
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the provider
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offer
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. These factors must be taken into consideration when thinking
to disallow
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about disallowing
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outsiders
,
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apply
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because they bring
much needed
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choice
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choices
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for buyers with them.
To conclude
,
although
there
have
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been
demand
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a demand
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of
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for
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banning outside business with consideration of
closure
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the closure
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of
few
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a few
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local shops and factories, I disagree with
this
action. It's because not only it
makes
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make
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positive
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a positive
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impact on
lower cost
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lower-cost
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offering to local customers but
also
provide an alternate option in markets where
single
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the single
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company holds it.
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