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The charts below give attendance figures for Grandville stadium from 2017 which are projected in 2030 after a major improvement project.

The charts below give attendance figures for Grandville stadium from 2017 which are projected in 2030 after a major improvement project.
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The chart gives information about the number of people who attended
in in
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Grandville Stadium
in
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 different occasions after the annual
developmet
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development
 in 2019.
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This
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 figures are
seperated
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separated
in
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 3 different
time
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 in 2017, 2020, and 2030. which is very noticeable in sporting Events in
comparision
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comparison
 to the others.
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bar
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 chart, there is a significant
diference
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difference
betwen
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between
attendances
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 in
sporting
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the sporting
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 area. which is almost three times more than
who
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those who
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are attending
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 a concert or
theater
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theatre
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in
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each year. It
also
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 illustrates that
interest
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the interest
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 rate in
theater
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theatre
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 in 2017 was
he
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the
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 least and
consist
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the
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 minority. Even though it reached
the
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its
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 peak
in
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,more than 20 years later but
it
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it was still
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under
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 50000. the eagerness for
for
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s sports was shown in the figures which was the highest trend
in
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 all the
times
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 and only faced a
a
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slight rise in
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further
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 years. The moderate rates of popularity belonged to concert activity which
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 a great jump from 25000 in2017 to more than 100000 in 2030.
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 theater fans,
on the contrary
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, constituted
small
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 proportion without any substantial growth
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