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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move regional areas outside large urban centres. To sing the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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last
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years
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 the number of people who prefer to see big
companies
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 and industries in
countryside
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the countryside
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 far from
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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have
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 increased significantly,
although
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 there are several advantages of
location
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the location
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 of these
companies
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 in
area
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the area
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 of districts, it can have some disadvantages as well. I will try to discuss both
positive
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the positive
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 and negative
side
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sides
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 of
this
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 and draw a conclusion. On the one
hand
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relocate
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relocating
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 large
companies
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 and
factories
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 to
countryside
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the countryside
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have
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has
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 a
lot
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 of impact. A primary advantage of moving these
companies
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 far from
cities
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 is that the amount of air pollution and noise
reduce
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is reduced
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 in towns.
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example
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this
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 type of
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companies
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company
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consume
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consumes
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 a
lot
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 of fossil
fuels
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 in
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 of goods and they release carbon dioxide into the atmosphere. There
for
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apply
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the quality of air in
cities
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 will be good. Another benefit of
this
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,
the
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is the
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 rate of traffic
jam
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jams
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 decreased.
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that
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 is because
,
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apply
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 big lorries and
other type
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another type
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 of
transports
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transport
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 distribute a
lot
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 of raw materials and goods to
factories
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.
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, the number of transport will be more
at
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on
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 narrow roads of
cities
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 and will
be collapse
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 there
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 despite
mention
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the mention
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 positive of relocating
factories
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 and
companies
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 to regional areas. One of the major
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of it is that
,
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 the price of the products grow up.
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, big
companies
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 consume much more
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fuels
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fuel
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 than residents of these areas,
therefore
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, they should distribute
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fuels
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fuel
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 themselves.
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, delivery of products
take
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 more time and additional
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fuels
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fuel
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 for trucks. Another important
to
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demerit is that
environment
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the environment
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suffer
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suffers
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 from these
companies
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. The reason for
this
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 is that
,
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 there are a
lot
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 of waste products which could be harmful
for
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to
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 wild animals and soil. In conclusion,
while
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 relocating big
companies
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 and
factories
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 in areas of district far from
cities
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 can offer several positives, there may be some drawbacks too. From my personal point of view
advantages
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the advantages
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 of it will outweigh the disadvantages

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