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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problem does this shortage cause? what measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

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Freshwater scarcity is turning becoming a major worldwide concern. What issue is brought about by
this
 shortage? When
people
 gradually lose clean
water
 sources for
use
, it will affect
people
's
lives
 and can lead to losses of
lives
 from using contaminated
water
.
Firstly
, the consequences of the shortage of fresh
water
 affect the health of residents or
organizations
.
Water
 is extremely vital to human health, so if
people
 don’t have fresh
water
 to
use
, they will be infected with some diseases by using polluted
water
. In Africa, the lack of fresh
water
 seriously affects their health and
lives
.
Secondly
, since some factories or electricity generation is based on
water
 energy
so
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they are slowed when there is no sufficient freshwater supply.
Thirdly
, the low percentage of freshwater makes the environment more and more polluted over time Because
this
 consequence greatly affects
people
's
lives
, the government and
organizations
 need to have some solutions to overcome
this
 situation. The government demands to introduce regulations on reasonable
water
use
.Some
organizations
 can coordinate campaigns to encourage
people
 to save fresh
water
.
On the other hand
, residents need to be conscious and responsible to
use
water
 more economically, effectively and reasonably. In conclusion,
water
 is very important for our
lives
 so
water
 resource protection is essential, Citizens have more or less clean
water
 to
use
 depending on their awareness and responsibility. The participation of individuals and
organizations
 in the rules set by the government
as well as
 the programs aimed to resolve the issue can help to some extent.
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