29.In recent years, “responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that it is not possible for

people

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who travel, to maintain their

culture

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and care for the environment when visiting other places.

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essay disagrees with

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statement because individuals are taught to protect the world and investigations are done first. The main reason for

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is that there is an increasing concern about protecting the planet. So

people

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in their own country, at schools, looking at the news and in other ways are taught about how important is to protect the place where they live. So they have in their mind what they should do and what not, and destroying the environment is one thing that they cannot do. Recent research concluded that in Germany

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there are a large number of tourists every month there is almost no trash on the floors, and there is

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increase in contamination and global warming even with the huge amount of visitors. Another reason is that when

people

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decide to travel to other countries will look for information about that place. Normally the internet has lots of information about the

culture

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of the nation and if there is something that individuals should really consider, it can be easily found on the internet.

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, when

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decide to visit somewhere because they like those places,

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they are willing to follow those cultures if needed.

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, there are more and more

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travelling to Asia, but their

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is very different from

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one,

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, most European

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are disposed to not do what is not allowed and follow their

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. In conclusion, travellers normally will carry out research in advance and they know from their own city and town that individuals should not harm the planet, I,

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, believe that it is possible to be a responsible tourist.

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The essay does not fully address the argument presented in the prompt. Make sure to clearly state your position on whether it is possible to be a responsible tourist.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Include a brief introduction that presents the topic and your position, as well as a conclusion that summarizes your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay provides some supporting points, but they are not well-developed or supported with evidence. Add more specific details, examples, or statistics to support your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay lacks a logical structure. Consider organizing your ideas more clearly and using paragraph breaks to separate different ideas.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary and language used in the essay are generally appropriate, but some sentences are awkwardly worded or unclear. Review your sentences for clarity and coherence.

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The essay demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures. Try to vary your sentence structures, use more complex sentences, and avoid repetition.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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301 words

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Your opinion

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