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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#countries #world #people #cities #population #countryside #development
In different cities all
the
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 world,
Due to
 coming Countryfields' citizens in
city
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,
A
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 number of
people
 will be found a few
reduction
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. In my opinion,
That is
 a positive alteration for developing their skill.
This
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However
,The Rural
people
 have their own knowledge
than
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urban
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the urban
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, But they are not able to improve their
career
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careers
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 by
practicing
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. For performing that, their
time
 will be limited, So they will be busy with doing
somethings
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some things
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.
Thay
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They
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 may be.
Such
 as
,
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 working garden at their home, Women are always
do
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doing
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houseworks
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housework
. As a
consequnce
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consequence
 of being lack of
time
. They will feel
themself
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exhausted. The first reason is little
time
.
Secondly
, Some facilities have no. Sometimes,
While
 preparing homework, Suddenly, The light will be
tuned
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turned
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 off.
As a result
,
Pupils
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mood
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moods
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 will fall down. Because
,
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 They can not finish their
work
 perfectly.
Finally
, they will be angry.
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, My
nighbour
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neighbour
,
that is
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also
face
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faces
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 to like those problems. In spite of loving her motherland, they want to move
city
for helping
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to help
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 her family and
rising
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raise
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 her
skill
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skills
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.
Moreover
, There are negative sides
of
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to
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 moving
urban
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to urban
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 places.
Firstly
, Owing to
coming
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the coming
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 of
countrysides'
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countrysides
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people
,
Public
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the Public
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 will meet the traffic jam.
This
 will bring some drawbacks,
that is
, Workers
do
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will
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 not manage to go their
work
 on
time
 and Some Leaders will get off from their
work
 and Have
an accidents
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accidents
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 will multiply by becoming a lot of
car
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cars
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.
For instance
, In the Tashkent capital, These situations will be.
People
 start to
the
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panic. So, In
rurals
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rural
, If
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apply
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It
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apply
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works
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work
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works
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 out some drawbacks, they do not need to come
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the
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city
. The best solution is that all
facilitis
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facilities
 need to be created.
To sum up
,
Although
being
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it is
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a negatives
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negatives
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negative
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 to go
city
, I
select
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prefer
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 to reside
to
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in
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the
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my capital presently
untill
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until
 amending some problems
at
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in
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 the countryside. As
i
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I
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writing
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wrote
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the
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above, For assisting to our family members and
growing us
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grow
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, We have to live
the
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in the
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city
.
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  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
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  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
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