Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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the statement that technology has made
man
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more social than ever especially mobile phones and
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the internet
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internet
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have changed the entire
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system from old manual methods.
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, social networks alike Facebook, Instagram and Telegram have changed to entire game and now
communication
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is
in
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people’s
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. Now
man
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can share their live activities within particular social groups which, has helped to enhance social networking.
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, Big-tech companies like Apple and
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has
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a significant contribution towards making social networking even more feasible than ever, by introducing new phone models and software which enable more social
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among the social communities of
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part of the
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in
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. These technological developments have connected
entire
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world
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into one platform and made
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world
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so small.
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,
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all the
man
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despite the gender or age gaps
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more interest
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new social networking
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which has become
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part of their life. With these mass connections
the
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social
communication
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became more and more effective. Previously,
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the man
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man
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men
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had to wait to get feedback for
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days, now people can get instant
feedbacks
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at
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cost and without any hassle.
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, technology is growing
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by
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and adding new features to the social networking. As an example,
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of ordinary email
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modern originations are using WhatsApp for their
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day to
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day
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communication
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which has given agility to their
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and regular business operations.
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, technology has connected
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world
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together and made
man
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more social than ever.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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