The charts showed us the data about two genres of TV shows watched by males and females in four different age groups in Australia.

The charts showed us the data about two genres of TV shows watched by males and females in four different age groups in Australia.
The bar charts
provides
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information about two genres of TV programmes watched by female and male viewers and four various
age
groups in Australia.
By
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the chart, we can see that women tend to watch
reality
shows more than men, but the
percentage
of women who watch
game
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games
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is slightly less than men's.
Also
, the bar charts show us that the
percentage
of the
age
group
above 45
watch
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watches
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reality
shows almost as many as
game
shows making it very similar to the
percentage
of the
age
group
between 16 and 24 where 51% of viewers are the same in
the
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both bar charts.
However
, the remaining
age
groups'
percentage
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differenciates
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differentiates
dramatically,
for example
, the
age
group
of 25-34 watch
reality
shows considerably more than
game
shows.
Whereas
, the
age
group
of 35-44 watch
game
shows significantly less than
reality
shows.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, reality, percentage, game, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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