The table below gives information on the gender, marital status and age of employees working in retail and manufacturing industries of a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on the gender, marital status and age of employees working in retail and manufacturing industries of a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram compares residents of a country who work in retail and manufacturing
industries
with their gender, marital status and
age
.
Overall
, the vast majority of the employees in both
industries
are married and in the
age
between 28
years
old to 39
years
old, whilst the gender distribution is extremely opposite.
According to
the information shown in the table, the proportion of male labourers exceeds that of female labourers by 30% in
manufactuering
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manufacturing
,
while
in retail
industries
female
empolyees
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employees
overtake male ones by 6%. As for
the
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marital status, most of the people in the survey are married which are
seperately
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separately
61% and 69%. When it comes to
age
coparison
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comparison
, the average
age
is 40 in retail and 44 in manufacturing. What
sould
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should
could
be particularly mentioned is that the proportion of individuals over 62
years
old is the lowest in retail which is 4%.
By contrast
, in
manufacturung
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manufacturing
, young workers who are between 16
years
old to 27
years
old are
fewest
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which is only 7%.
To sum up
, in the two
industries
, the gender of employees is distributed considerably
different
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,
while
the rest two sections have relatively slight differences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words industries, age, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • predominant
  • average age range
  • noticeable trends
  • gender distribution
  • marital status
  • striking features
  • defies common stereotypes
  • patterns
  • notably younger or older
  • workforce
  • implications
  • hiring practices
  • work culture
  • marketing strategies
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