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Living In A Country Where You Have To Speak A Foreign Language Can Cause Serious Social And Practical Problems

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I agree with the statement. Humans are social creatures. Everyone
are
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 dependent on one another. Humans have to socialize in order to
fulfill
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 their needs. Starting from buying groceries from shops, working and presenting your work, ordering food from a restaurant, asking
people
 for directions and more. Those are
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examples of our day-to-day routine that requires other individuals,
also
 known as socializing. But there is no point in socializing if no one understands what you are saying.
People
 would just give you a bamboozled, perplexed look on their face, saying other things which you
also
 do not understand. Facing those reactions
everyday
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 could leave you feeling hopeless, depressed and isolated. It could be impossible to
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 your needs alone without any help. At school, you can not make friends, you won’t understand the lessons the teacher has taught and fail your exams. You
also
 won’t get
informations
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information
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 that the other citizens get, leaving you clueless.
Most
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 of the countries in the world,
people
 could only speak one
language
, their local official
language
.
For example
 in Vietnam, I went there to participate in World Mathematics Invitational Final Round.
People
 in Vietnam could not speak a word of English. Everywhere, announcements are made in
Vietnamese
. The train announcement, the bus announcement and even the competition announcement. I did not have a clue and just went ahead. At a
Vietnamese
 school, two girls approached me and said something so I just nodded my head and they were confused. I
also
 got lost because all the roads and buildings are named in
Vietnamese
.
People
 could not give me directions either because I do not speak
Vietnamese
. Not being able to speak a foreign
language
 in another country could be difficult. But we’re lucky enough that today’s technology
could
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 translate any
language
 for us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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