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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support received from employers.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support received from employers.
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The provided bar graphs depict the proportions of the
sudents
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students
 of various age categories based on their reasons for studying and how much financial
assitance
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assistance
 and time off was given in each category by the employer.
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, a significant percentage of younger
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 were studying for their
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, those aged above 49 enrolled because they were
intrested
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interested
 in the course. The companies contributed substantially when it comes to the
students
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 in their 20s and for the rest their
assitance
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assistance
 was average. In detail, almost 80% of the
students
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 who were under 26 were studying so that they could work in future.
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 percentage was the lowest in
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 of those who were over 49, around 18%.
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 category peaked at 70% as they reasoned their interest in the subject matter to be the main cause. Both of these reasons were mentioned by those who were in their 40s , approximately 40%. The
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 aged 30-39 got 34% support from their company.
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 of the
students
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 under 26 (63%). Other categories: 26-29, 40-49 and over 49
recieved
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received
 51%, 38% and 45% of fee coverage and downtime
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 their manager, apiece.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Adult education
  • Career advancement
  • Personal enrichment
  • Academic pursuits
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Educational attainment
  • Tuition reimbursement
  • Flexible work arrangements
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial assistance
  • Professional growth
  • Study leave
  • Employee retention
  • Workforce development
  • Time management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivational factors
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