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the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison. write at least 150 words.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison. write at least 150 words.
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The chart depicts the number of
goods
 that
transported
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were transported
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 in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four
kind
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kinds
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 of
transportations
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transportation
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 which were road, water, rail
dan
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and
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 pipeline.
overall
, road transportation could send the most
goods
 compared to the others,
while
pipeline
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the pipeline
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 method showed the least
goods
 that were transported. From the
begining
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beginning
,
road
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the road
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 system
already
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apply
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started to transport more
that
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than
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 60
millions
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million
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 tonnes of
goods
 which
were
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was
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 the highest compared to other
methodes
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methods
 and reached
it's
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its
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 peak in 2002. in comparison,
railway
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the railway
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 mode could transfer things relatively the same each year from 1974 to 2002 which were around 40 million tonnes despite
showed
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showing
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 some decline in the
midle
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middle
.
Additionally
, products that were sent by waterway appeared
increasing
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to increase
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 every year from 1974 to 2002 except
a
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for a
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slight dip in 1998. By far comparison, pipeline metode started low in 1974 and gradually increased its number to their highest products in 1982 to 1990.
Altough
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Although
 after that, they showed a slight decrease in
numbes
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numbers
number
 from 1994 to 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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