The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The floor plan compares the setting of a public
library
in the past and present.
Overall
, more facilities are added.
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of traditional
books
have been removed
but
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and
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replaced with new technology.
It is clear that
many things have changed from the past and present floor
plan
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. Two decades ago, the central
library
had 5 sections of
books
:
the
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children’s
books
on
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the top right
corner
, below was
the
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adult’s
non-fictions
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, magazines and
newspaper
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on
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the bottom left
corner
, and adults’s
fictions
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fiction
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above the reading
section
. There
was
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tables and chairs in the middle of the
library
. An enquiry desk was situated
on
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the bottom right
corner
. There was
also
a computer
section
on
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the top left
corner
.
It is clear that
the central
library
has changed considerably.
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the 4 main corners are still occupied but modified. On the top left
corner
,the
section
consists of a
story telling
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area and children’s
fictions
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fiction
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with some sofas. The reference
books
section
is above the computer
section
on
bottom
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left
corner
. The lecture room is placed
on
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the top right
corner
. Opposite to it is the cafe which is below an information desk and
adult’s
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fictions
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fiction
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. The entrance hall is clear for more space.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books, corner, section with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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