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Some people think that interview is not reliable method of choosing whom to employ. there is other methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In
Contemporary
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the Contemporary
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 rapidly changing employment landscape,
employer
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employers
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recruited
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recruit
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 workers in many ways. Some people
understood
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understand
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 that
interview
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an interview
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in
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is
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 a very Convenient method to choose
employee
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an employee
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while
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of
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apply
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argue that there are some other methods which should considered.
this
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 essay will delve deeper
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this
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into this
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 context, presenting
argumants
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arguments
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comprehensive
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a comprehensive
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 analysis. On one hand, the proponents of
interview
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the interview
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 Contended that
,
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apply
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 there are lots of benefits to
choose
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choosing
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 workers. First of all, it provides
opportunity
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an opportunity
the opportunity
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 to
direct
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directly
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 communicate with Job
seeker
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seekers
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 and judge the
examinees
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examinee's
examinees'
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 Communication skills,
how
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and how
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 they approach every
answers
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answer
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.
In addition
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,
employer
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the employer
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 get a chance to observe his attitude,
face to face
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face-to-face
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 interaction,
his
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apply
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punctuality, intelligence of presentation.
Consequently
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, these
observation
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observations
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 are
helpfull
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helpful
 for a
Company
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 to
who
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apply
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recruit the night person who
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is
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responsible
to foster
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for fostering
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companies
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the company's
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 economic growth and
overall
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 well-being.
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, there are
also
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 so
huge
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many
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method
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methods
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 to examine the night person to recruit in
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Company
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a Company
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. Advocate of
this
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perspectives
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perspective
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 asserts that
company
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 should consider
to choose
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choosing
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 a better employee by taking practical skill test,
written
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and written
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 test.
Moreover
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, these
examination
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examinations
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seams
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seem
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 to be a huge
benefits
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benefit
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.
Employer
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An employer
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 directly examine
a
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an
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employees
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employee's
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potentiality
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potential
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 and decide
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whether
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wether
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whether
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 he or she better fit or not for
his
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their
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company
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 In conclusion, though there are huge
a
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apply
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ways to recruit a person for a
company
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. I
believed
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believe
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 that considering
to
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apply
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only
interview
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interviews
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 to select an employee should not be a prudent approach, there are
also
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 Some ways that should
have to
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apply
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be considered for
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overall
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the overall
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companies
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company's
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 well-being.

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task achievement
The essay does not fully address the task. It is important to clearly state the extent to which you agree or disagree in the introduction. Additionally, the ideas presented in the body paragraphs lack clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and logical structure. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and provide supporting details. The ideas presented should be organized in a logical manner.
lexical resource
The essay lacks variety in vocabulary. Try to use a wider range of words and phrases to express your ideas.
grammatical range accuracy
There are several grammatical errors throughout the essay. Pay attention to verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and word order.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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