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the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison.
The given line graph illustrates the
goods
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 transport methods
had
Verb problem
apply
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use
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used
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 from 1974 to 2002. They have used four transport methods for delivering
goods
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such
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 as road, water, rail and pipeline.
Overall
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, every delivery
methods
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method
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 had
upward
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an upward
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 trend over the given period except rail and rail was the highest used transport system in
this
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 period.
Pipeline
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The pipeline
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 was the
lowest
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most
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 used delivery system in the UK, in 1974, less than 10
million
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tones
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 of
goods
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delivered
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were delivered
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 by pipeline and
then
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 it gradually increased to 30
million
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tones
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 in 1982, after that
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the pipline
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pipline
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pipeline
 delivered
the
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a
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 stable amount of
goods
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untill
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until
 1990.
In contrast
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, the road is the most famous method in the UK for delivering
goods
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. In 1974, it was around 70
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 and
then
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 over the period it fluctuated
70
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from 70
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 to 90
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 and
finally
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, it
has
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apply
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stopped
in
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at
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 around 90
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
However
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, water was
second
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the second
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 most used method, it
was
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apply
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started
around
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at around
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 40
milliion
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million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1974 and after 1982, it showed
the
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a
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 stable movement till 1994 and after 1994 it showed
quick
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a quick
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 drop and again in 1998 it started to increase.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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