Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it doesn't solve poverty. therefore developed countries should give other type of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answers with examples.

I strongly believe that
this
academy is best suited for me because
this
academy
provide
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a framework to enable the
university
to confer its academic awards.
This
university
provided some facilities
such
as accommodation,
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access@SW15
, conferences and events, disability services,
learning
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and teaching enhancement unit, registry and
student
enquiries, schools and college engagement,
service
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desk and many more. Even though
,
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all the information provided on the
university
website is very clear
therefore
everyone can understand it very easily.
Additionally
,
this
academy's
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provid
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provides
library,
student
support and welfare support.
Moreover
, the
student
easily find some additional activities
such
as music, social spaces, sports,
student
blog
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and vlogs. The external examiners are responsible for setting examinations board dates and moderation timelines in liaison with their externals
also
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provide online and the materials include an introduction to the
university
a recorded presentation with slides on the role of the external examiner and the assessment processes at Roehampton.
This
university
runs various academic areas
such
as arts, business and law, nursing, psychology and many more. The
university
offer
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a wide range of career workshops and events so that students can both engage with employers and gain the skills they need to succeed in the workplace.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Make sure to clearly state your position and summarize your main points.
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The essay does not provide a clear answer to the question. Make sure to clearly state your extent of agreement or disagreement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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