Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or Antarctica. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this travel?

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amount of tourists wish to visit
areas
with hard climates, e.g. Sahara or
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Antarctica
.
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travels
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may have
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and drawbacks
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.  On the
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visiting
such
special
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place
is a unique
advanture
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advantage
, these
places
are not found in every country and being there may occur once a life. visitors can meet special people living just in
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places
, visitors may see special animals and species of trees and flowers that are not found everywhere. In
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,
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may remain with unique
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memories
for the lifelong.
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hand
, visiting these
places
may be a dangerous experience. People have to prepare themselves
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areas
. The climate there may be extremely hot or cold,
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, there may be wild animals that don't exist in ordinary
places
and
one
must know how to behave with
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for
such
travel may hold devastating
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repercussions
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where the
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circumstances
are not ordinary, may be
such
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and
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pleasant
trip, that may happen
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one
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account
that suitable equipment and clothes are needed in order not to risk him/
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herself
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventurous
  • challenging
  • exotic
  • unforgettable
  • appreciate
  • nature's beauty
  • test limits
  • cultures
  • lifestyles
  • escape
  • hustle and bustle
  • dangerous
  • resources
  • facilities
  • health risks
  • safety concerns
  • cost of travel
  • accommodation
  • accessibility
  • communication
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