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It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they use to be. Give some reason why this is change has happened and suggest how family could be brought together.

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These days life is changed
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 believe that curate families are not important,
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 others think that families are most common in their lives.
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 do not have the parents or
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 they deed or they do not know them so , that's why some think
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 not important to visit the
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 and not close to them
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 thinking so , some
people
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 believe that curated
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household
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 are not important,
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 others think that
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households
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household
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 are
most
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 common in their lives.
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 , if your family
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 you it is fine , the family means your soul is better with them When you visit your mothers or father you feel like back at your home
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