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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph below compares the number of visitors
of
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 a special Caribbean
island
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 based on two various kinds of accommodation during a 7-year period. Measures are in
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million
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millions
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Overall
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,
although
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 at the beginning of the studied period staying on
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island
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the island
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 was more admired,
at the end
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 of the studied period the popularity of residing on
cruise
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ships
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 overtook.
Also
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, the whole number of
travelers
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travellers
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 to the Caribbean
island
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 experienced a sharp growth. In 2010, 0.3
million
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 visitors
inclined
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were inclined
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 to reside on
cruise
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ships
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,
while
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 0.8
million
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 tourists tended to reside on
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island
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the island
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. Considering some fluctuations, both these trends increased, reaching to 1.2million and 1.5
million
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 in 2015 respectively.
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,
the
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mid 2015
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mid-2015
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 was the point of intersection, and staying on
cruise
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ships
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 became more popular than staying on
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island
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the island
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, reaching
to
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apply
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a peak
by
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of
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 2
million
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. Shifting to the number of visitors to the Caribbean
island
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, it saw a sharp increase, reaching from 1
million
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 in 2010 to 3.5
million
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 in 2017. Except from 2015 to 2016 when the favor of staying on
cruise
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ships
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 and staying on
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island
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the island
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 reversed and the growth remained stable.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, million, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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