It is recommended that traditional market be phased out and replaced by supermarket and e-commerce. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

There is an argument that
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market will be predicted in the future which will
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over by
supermarket
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supermarkets
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and e-commerce. In
this
topic, I strongly agree, as I suppose that there are two reasons related to
this
issue, which I will state in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, nowadays the rapid development of
technology
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be avoided
indeed
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. Mostly people in the world prefer to use
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beneficial
technology
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there are more easily accessible.
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Internet,
for instance
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essential
technology
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been implemented in start-up
business
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businesses
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or e-commerce since it offers numerous advantages to the enterprise. Potential buyers can access easily wherever they are by clicking
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this
start-up website to find the items they would like to purchase.
As a result
, it might change
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people’s
habit
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habits
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from buying
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goods in
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market to online e-commerce source one.
Secondly
, the cleanliness and comfortable modern supermarket will be one of
this
reason why people apparently like to go
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facility. Buyers will
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more convenient to purchase some goods by sightseeing in
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storefronts
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by detailing the price tag in vary of things. They might not only compare a price but
also
could check the quality of the goods.
In addition
,
supermarket
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also
offers their catalogue
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website or leaflet so that people easier to find out detail By way of conclusion, I am highly convinced that the mentioned phenomenon in the statement will occur in the
nearest
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future.
Due to
the beneficial
technology
development,
such
as
internet
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and the convenience factor or reason, they will substitute the era of
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the traditional
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market.
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