The graph shows how many percentages of people who lived in poverty in Austrlia in 199

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sole parents made up the largest proportion of poor families

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aged couples accounted for the least share.

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was by far higher than that of other categories, accounting for 21% (232,000) The second place in the list was recorded by those who had no children or single child, with 19%(359,000), being 7% higher than that of family who had children. Other sectors, namely, old

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, single aged person and

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without children accounted for between more than 4%

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than 7%. It is the total households made up 11% (1,837,000)

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