In some countries, ordinary citizens are allowed to keep a gun in their houses. Some people think this is a good idea, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whether the public should be entitled to own a gun or not is a topic of heated debate. Some people advocate for
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and explain why I agree with the latter/former.
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Proponents
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of
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idea believe that the government should allow the residents to possess in their houses for self-defense. On the one hand, in cases of suddenly finding a thief, people who do not have guns are likely to put themselves and their
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in danger of getting killed, in the worst-case scenario. Especially, in some countries that have high crime rates, the states give citizens permission to use firearms so
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they in order to protect themselves from accidents.
However
, if not, they may start protests causing some social instabilities.
On the other hand
, possessing guns is not necessarily a must
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home as in certain situations, it is more of a threat
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residents rather than saving them. Public safety still can be ensured through some other measures taken by the states
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as increasing the number of police officers patrolling residential areas.
Moreover
, the government can impose stricter laws and punishments for those who break the rules. Those approaches can tackle
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of ordinary citizens about dangerous crimes and protect them from
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consequences of
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use of weapons. Especially, mass shootings in the USA recently are
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possessing firearms. Many cases of innocent people are killed, especially children, which
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the need to prohibit guns. in conclusion, private weapons
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not necessarily a must in
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personally believe that gun is just used by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
to protect residents.
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