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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not Every year several are will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is generally believed by certain
people
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 that the extinction of
languages
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are
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 increasing every year in the world. These
people
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 claim that the reduction of
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are
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is
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 necessary for
the
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 successful life. From my perspective,
this
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 trend is completely flawed owing to the drawbacks in terms
of out
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of
traditions
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 and
language
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barriers
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.
To begin
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 with, certain
people
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 accepted the die out of several
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. Typically, there are
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varieties
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of varieties
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 of
languages
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are
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available
in
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all over the
country
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.
These
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increased
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 leads to
language
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barriers
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to
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for
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the
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apply
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students who
wanted
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want
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 to study in other countries.
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, India has a large number of
languages
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 in their
country
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.
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, if they want to study in
other
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the other
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 side of
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country
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the country
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, they
faced
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face
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 difficulties
due to
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language
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barriers
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.
As a result
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, higher varieties of
languages
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 can create a communication barrier between
the
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people
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 are wary of raising their own customs and cultures.
Therefore
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, they wanted to continue their own
traditions
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 with their generations.
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Otherwise
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 it will be erased by others.
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, a child who was born in
other
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another country
other countries
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country
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. He/she should speak in
abandoned
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an abandoned
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language
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due to
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for
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 study or communication purposes.
As a result
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, he/she has continuously lost their native tongue in order to focus on other
languages
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. Likely, customs of tradition will be
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 consistently.
As a result
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, native
languages
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 are
effected
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affected
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 by
development
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developing
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 countries.
To conclude
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, despite the benefits,
traditions
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 are important for every human.
Therefore
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, they can
arise
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raise
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 their own culture without any
barriers
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. From my perspective,
extinction
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the extinction
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 of
languages
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 should be stopped by governments,
otherwise
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,
people
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are
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will
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lost
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lose
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 their own
traditions
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.
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