The chart below shows the value of one’s country exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015

The chart below shows the value of one’s country exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015
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bar chart illustrates the income of
export
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five
differnt
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different
items in one country in 2015 &
2016
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and 2016
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and
below
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the below
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table compares
percentage
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the percentage
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the
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of the
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difference
of
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vaule
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value
in two
years
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.
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, Petroleum products were the most
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export
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exported
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in both
years
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and textiles were the least
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export
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exported
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in both
years
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. In 2015, $ 60
billion
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earned
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from petroleum products
export
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and
this
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income increased from 3% in 2016. Engineered goods earned around 55
billion
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dollers
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dollars
in 2015 and
next
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the next
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year
this
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value grew from 8.5% .
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, gems &
jewellery
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and jewellery
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income decreased in 2016 from 5.18% which was $ 40
billion
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and
in
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in 2015, it was around 45
billion
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dollers
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dollars
. In
this
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chart we can not see
consideralbe
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considerable
change
from
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in
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agricultural products, both
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years
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export
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earning was quite
simillar
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similar
, it was 0.81% growth in 2016.
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, from
Textiles
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we can see the highest value difference, which was 15.24% growth in 2016. In 2015, textiles
export
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earing was around $25
billion
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while
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in 2016, it was above $ 30
billion
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, years, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • value
  • categories
  • percentage change
  • petroleum products
  • engineered goods
  • gems and jewelry
  • agricultural products
  • textiles
  • increase
  • decrease
  • global market demand
  • production capacity
  • international trade policies
  • performance
  • growth
  • decline
  • strategies
  • trends
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