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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The given table delineates the information related to the price of
water
 in five distinct cities
of
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 Australia. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the value of
water
 is more if the
usage
 is over 125KL as compared to when
water
 is utilised
upto
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up to
 125KL only in most of the cities, except for
melbourne
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Melbourne
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 and
sydney
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Sydney
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. Sydney
have
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has
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 the highest amount for the
usage
 of
water
 till 125KL
that
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which
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 is 0.98
dollar
, which is constant even if the utilization is more than 125KL.
While
,
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 0.42
dollar
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dollars
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 is the least cost paid for consumption of the
water
 under 125KL in Adelaide and Perth.
This
 amount gets increased to 1
dollar
 for Adelaide and
more
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apply
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0.50
dollar
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dollars
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 for Perth. Brisbane
cost
Wrong verb form
costs
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 the
water
usage
 at the rate of 0.8
dollar
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dollars
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 for 125KL or less,
while
this
 gets increased by 0.03
dollar
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dollars
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 for more than 125KL. In Melbourne, the price remains constant even if
water
usage
 is less than or more than 125KL, which counts for 0.78
dollar
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dollars
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. The average bill per household is the highest in Perth which is 332
dollars
,
while
 the least accounts for 253
dollars
 in Melbourne. 312
dollars
 are paid by the people living in Adelaide and 2
dollars
 less in Brisbane. Citizen of Sydney gives 319
dollars
 as an average bill for the
water
usage
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, kl, dollar, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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