Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree. You should write at least 250 words.

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are
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number
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of people who thinks that schools should focus only on
the
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academic success and help
students
to pass their examination and skills like cookery, dressmaking and
wood work
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woodwork
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should not be taught in
the
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apply
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schools. They
states
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,
these
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that these
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skills can be
develoved
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developed
devolved
by
parents
as well as
by friends of that student. From my perspective, I strongly believe that
this
statement is correct, but I will be explaining both points of view with the support of some relevant examples. To commence with,
school
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schools
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should focus mainly on the studies of the
students
. Providing them
better
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with better
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educaction
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education
,
that
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is the main
obejective
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objective
that the
parents
send their children to
schools
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school
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.
This
help
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them to get better remarks in the examinations, which help them to improve their academic background.
In addition
to
this
,
student
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students
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with
some
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excellent academic
record
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records
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may receive
some
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better job opportunities in
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the futur
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futur
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future
as compared to
the
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other people. For
an
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instance, there are many countries with
parents
who want
there
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their
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children to be a doctor or an engineer,
instead
of
chef
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chefs
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or fashion
designer
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designers
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.
These kind
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of fields can only be achieved if the children focus more on their studies and examinations
instead
of some other
activities
. Even there are few guardians or
parents
who suggest that the
school
should provide sports
activity
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activities
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instead
of some
extra curricular
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extracurricular
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activities
. In
contarst
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contrast
to
this
,
students
and their
parents
prefer that
school
should have some other skills aside from the subjects and examinations,
such
as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork.
This
help
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helps
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them to develop their resume stronger and opens many industrial opportunities. Let's assume
if
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the
school
have some other
activities
such
as cookery,
this
will help the student to grow their foundation if he or she wants to be a chef.
To conclude
,
school
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schools
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should provide some
of
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apply
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other
extra curricular
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extracurricular
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activities
but should not make them mandatory for every
students
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student
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to learn them.
This
will
t
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help
students
to
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apply
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achieve
whatsoever
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whatever
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goal they want to achieve.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic success
  • passing examinations
  • cookery
  • dressmaking
  • woodwork
  • learn from family and friends
  • personalized learning environment
  • supportive learning environment
  • well-rounded education
  • school curriculum
  • resources
  • expert guidance
  • enhance creativity
  • problem-solving
  • teamwork
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