The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.

The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.
The
given
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diagram
clearly
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below clearly
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depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production. Looking from an
overall
perspective, the production requires multiple machines and involves 5 main stages which begin with filtering raw
water
and culminate in delivering boxes in which fizzy drinks are put to supermarkets for
consume
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consumption
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. In the first
stage
, raw
water
passes through
from
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the filter and
mixed
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is mixed
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with
water
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a water
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softener and other chemicals. In the evaporation and carbonation
stage
, with the help of electric heaters,
water
is heated and
then
goes through the cooling pipe. During
this
step, carbon dioxide is added to
water
and
mixture
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the mixture
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goes to
mixing
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a mixing
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tank in which syrup ,flavour and colouring are added to
water
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the water
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. In the subsequent
stage
,
again
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apply
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drinks are filtered and filled
to
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into
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the
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either bottles or cans. In the
last
stage
, filled bottles and cans are packaged and sent to supermarkets where drinks are sold and 
consume
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consumed
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.
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