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The given charts present information on the distribution of oil resources across different regions of the world and the proportion of oil consumption in those regions.

The given charts present information on the distribution of oil resources across different regions of the world and the proportion of oil consumption in those regions.
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pie chart illustrates the classification of
oil
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 resources in various areas of the world and the amount of
oil
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 consumed in those parts.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the Middle East has the highest quantity of
oil
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reserved
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,
while
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 other regions
such
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 as Europe, Asia, Eurasia, and Africa hold relatively little. As for the region that holds the biggest share of
oil
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, it is considered to be the Middle East, with 803,60
BBL
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 and 49% of consumed
oil
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.
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, the second area to grasp the largest amount of
oil
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 is Central and South America, with 328,26
BBL
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 and 20% of used
oil
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. In comparison, the zones that had the lowest percentage of reserved
oil
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as well as
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 the highest quantity of drained
oil
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 are considered to be Asia, Europe, Eurasia, Africa and North America. As for Asia and Europe, both grasped about (46.01,
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)
BBL
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 and used (3%,
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and 1
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%), respectively.
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 both Eurasia and Africa hold (118.89,
126.73
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and 126.73
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)
BBL
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 and drain almost (7%,
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and 8
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%), respectively. And
lastly
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 is North America, which relatively grasps 219,79
BBL
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 and consumes nearly 13% of
oil
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, bbl with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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