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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the
comparion
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comparison
 of washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner
ownership
 and
amount
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the amount
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 of time spent
during
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on
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 housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
,
while
 all of the
ownership
 of machines showed
the
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an
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 increasing trajectory during the period shown, time spent
for
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on
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 housework
expreinced
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experienced
experience
the
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a
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 downward trend. In 1920, washing machine
ownership
was dominate
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dominated
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 the market with
40
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a 40
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% percentage and it rose significantly to above 70% in 2019. From 1920 to 1980, both
of
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apply
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refrigerator and vacuum cleaner
percentage
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percentages
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 dramatically increased from almost 0% and 30% to 100% and 90% , respectively.
Although
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the Refrigerator
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Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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 reached to
pleatue
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pleasure
please
with
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of
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 %100
percent
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per cent
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 in 1980, vacuum cleaner
ownership
continue
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continued
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 to grow until
2000s
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the 2000s
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 and reached
to
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apply
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the highest point
with
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of
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 100% in that year. In 1920 people were spending nearly 50 hours per week
for
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on
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 the
houseworks
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housework
 and it decreased constantly until 1960 to
reached
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reach
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 20 hours.
This
 downward trend
continue
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continued
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 through to period and in 2019 households were spending nearly 10 hours in the house jobs.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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