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The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the number of four
products
 sold by a
coffee
 shop between different time ranges in an office building on a typical weekday.
Overall
,
coffee
 is the most sold item per portion throughout
typical
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 day,
while
 tea
demonstares
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is
 the least
intereseted
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interesting
 option among other
products
.
In addition
, From 7:30 to 10:30 all
products
' total
sales
 is the most significant compared to other periods.
Coffee
 and pastries
sales
 are holding the most impressive figures per product, showing the highest with 265, and 275 items, respectively between 7:30 and 10:30. Both
products
sales
 follow a downward trend in a day. Pastries exhibits a fluctuation at 80-95
products
 between 10:30 and 8:30,
Coffee
 experience a slight increase to 200 items in the period of from 5:30 to 8:30. Tea and sandwiches
sales
 relatively few compared to other
products
, representing 110 and 50
sales
 per item in the first period.
While
 sandwiches sale are escalating from 7:30 to 8:30, tea follow a similar trends of
coffee
 and pastries, exhibiting 75
sales
 at the
last
 period of serving.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, coffee, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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