Some people think robots can improve human life in future, while others think robots may affect society in a bad way. Discuss both view points and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
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become
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has become
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a part of our lives, and every day we see big changes in
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improvement.
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, in recent years
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have started taking the human place
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;
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therefore
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, life
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has become
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easier than past . But unfortunately,
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has a bad impact on communication
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and
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society way.
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, there are
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who have strong beliefs in the first opinion
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contrast,
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there are
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who see that the negative point is more than a good point. Many
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strongly believe that the future depends on
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and that in future
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person
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only
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will work. In
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there is
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a community
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started taking
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step as China now
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of restaurants
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replaced the polite with
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, and they are trying to make
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look like humans so that children can accept the new change in the world . In another
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instance,
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now with the new generation of Artificial
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(AI) as CHATGPT or PEO
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, getting
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new information is easier
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you can
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the homework and a great presentation with only one click . The negative stop in
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is that
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lost their advanced search
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and their ability to think about what was happening around them .
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contrast
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contrast,
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on the
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hand ,
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there are a
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of good
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impacts,
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there are a
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of bad effects of improving
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. Despite the long distance ,
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can communicate with their family and
friend
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friends
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whom they
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who
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are away from them
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, but
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this
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impact
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impacts
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society , because meeting in real life makes the connection between them better
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with online .
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, during the
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war,
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there will not be
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internet
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society will not be able to connect with each other , which will affect their relationships.
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,
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may lose their public speaking
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and nowadays,
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this
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these
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skills
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one
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are one
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of the most significant
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to get a job . In conclusion , there are good points to using
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but
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, but
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they
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have a
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of impacts on
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world
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in my
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I strongly believe in the first opinion

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relevant examples
You included relevant examples of robots being used in restaurants and AI tools like ChatGPT.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • repetitive tasks
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • safety
  • hazardous environments
  • healthcare
  • caregiving
  • job displacement
  • unemployment
  • dependence
  • technology
  • ethical concerns
  • human touch
  • misuse
  • privacy invasion
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • improve
  • affect
  • society
  • future
  • viewpoints
  • opinion
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