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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates different exports from Scotland to the UK and other countries of the world in the year 2014. The amounts are in billions. It can be clearly observed that most of the trades inside the United Kingdom were chemicals and mineral products,
while
 the least of them were from agriculture, forestry, fishing and mining.
Moreover
, the majority of shipments
to
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outside of the country were business
services
 and finance, health and restaurant
services
. In 2014, 5
billion
 chemical and mineral products were sold inside the country and was the highest income sector in
country
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,
whereas
 only 0.6
billion
 was earned from agriculture, forestry, fishing and mining.
Thus
 indicated the lowest income generator
to
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 the United Kingdom. Compared to inbound freight, outbound sell income was more than 10 times bigger.
Furthermore
, best selling items were business
services
 and finance,
helath
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health
 and restaurant
services
 under
this
 category. The inflow of money from those was approximately 13.8
billion
 euros.
In addition
, an earning
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 little as 2.3
billion
 euros was earned through electrical and instrument engineering during the time period.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • exports
  • Scotland
  • rest of the UK
  • rest of the world
  • comparisons
  • total value
  • higher
  • percentage
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating trend
  • significant contribution
  • export market
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