The line graph provides information about the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010.

The line graph provides information about the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010.
The line graph provides information about the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010. There are four
attracations
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attractions
that had been competing with each other - Art Gallery,
Pavilion
, Pier and Festival. We can see at the beginning of
this
line graph in 1980 there were two favourite attractions that are Festival and
Pavilion
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the Pavilion
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, which percentages
shows
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show
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us
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apply
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30% and 23%, but in 1995 we can notice the differences. The trend for the Festival fell
steadly
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steadily
from 30% to 25%,
however
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the number of tourists who visited the
Pavilion
increased rapidly from 23% to 48% in just 15 years.
Then
, if we look forward into
this
line graphic, it is noticeable that between 1995 and 2000 the
Pavilion
's percentages decreased widely to 36%. Even though the Festival's
graphic
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graphics
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rose gradually, it did not hit the
Pavilion
's one.
By contrast
, the percentages for the other places went up, but the trends are not similar to each other. Visitors climbed sharply for the Art Gallery between 1980 and 1985 from 22% to 37%. The visitors to the Pier
also
rose, but gradually from 10% to 15% between these years.
Also
, in 1985 the Art Gallery was the most
populay
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popular
trend after
Pavilion
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the Pavilion
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pavilion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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