The line graph provides information about the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010.

#line #information #percentage #tourists #england #brighton #attractions

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The line graph provides information about the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010. There are four

attracations

Correct your spelling

attractions

that had been competing with each other - Art Gallery,

Pavilion

Use synonyms

, Pier and Festival. We can see at the beginning of

this

Linking Words

line graph in 1980 there were two favourite attractions that are Festival and

Use synonyms

Pavilion

Correct article usage

the Pavilion

show examples

, which percentages

shows

Change the verb form

show

show examples

Correct pronoun usage

apply

show examples

30% and 23%, but in 1995 we can notice the differences. The trend for the Festival fell

steadly

Correct your spelling

steadily

from 30% to 25%,

Linking Words

however

Add a comma

however,

show examples

the number of tourists who visited the

Pavilion

Use synonyms

increased rapidly from 23% to 48% in just 15 years.

Then

Linking Words

, if we look forward into

this

Linking Words

line graphic, it is noticeable that between 1995 and 2000 the

Pavilion

Use synonyms

's percentages decreased widely to 36%. Even though the Festival's

graphic

Fix the agreement mistake

graphics

show examples

rose gradually, it did not hit the

Pavilion

Use synonyms

's one.

By contrast

Linking Words

, the percentages for the other places went up, but the trends are not similar to each other. Visitors climbed sharply for the Art Gallery between 1980 and 1985 from 22% to 37%. The visitors to the Pier

also

Linking Words

rose, but gradually from 10% to 15% between these years.

Also

Linking Words

, in 1985 the Art Gallery was the most

populay

Correct your spelling

popular

trend after

Use synonyms

Pavilion

Correct article usage

the Pavilion

show examples

Submitted by dnm.best on Mon Oct 16 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

▼

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words pavilion with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

▼

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

207 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5.5
band
Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Learning about other countries and cultures is something interesting. What is the way to achieve this study?, and how to learn about it? There are arguments about those ways some say they can learn from books or other sources instant of travel. This essay will discuss both points of view and will be explained.
5
band
sometimes spouses have to live far away from each other. maintaining a long distance relationship is sometimes difficult and straining. what do you think are the main reasons of long distance relationships?what can be done to help couples feel closer?
Nowadays living long distances among spouses is becoming more and more common than it used to be decades or centuries ago. It is considered by some people that supporting such relationships may be hardly, nervously and stressful. This essay will examine most causes of these associations between individuals and provide some possible solutions for feeling closer to each other.
8
band
We always say that there is a generation gap and there always will be. What causes generation gap? Is there no way to strike a balance in the relations between two generations?
A persistent issue in the modern era is the widening disparity between generations, which could be significantly mitigated by implementing the following remedies. This essay will explore the underlying reasons for the generation gap widening and suggest some optimal solutions to balance relations between the two generations.
5
band
Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.Others,However,say that this woud have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
To improve public health some people suggest that the sports can play a vital role. It is said that “Healthy mind is in a Healthy body”. By increasing the number of sports facilities we can create an environment of courage, sportsmanship, and tolerance. The minds of youth can also be directed towards healthy activities through sports promotion.
6
band
the Internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are .on the other hand it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledage or experience .
It is believed that the internet is an essential tool in the globe due to the fact that it helps us to keep in touch anywhere in the world. However, some websites have become an obsession and motivate us to stay at home instead of meeting our friends. I believe that it has an important role in our lives if we use it correctly because it covers the social and business aspects of our lives.

The line graph provides information about the percentage of tourists to England who visited certain Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010.

Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

sometimes spouses have to live far away from each other. maintaining a long distance relationship is sometimes difficult and straining. what do you think are the main reasons of long distance relationships?what can be done to help couples feel closer?

We always say that there is a generation gap and there always will be. What causes generation gap? Is there no way to strike a balance in the relations between two generations?

Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.Others,However,say that this woud have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.