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The graghic below illustrates the amount of changes in the share of international scholars among university graduates in diffrent Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

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 below illustrates the amount of changes in the share of international scholars among university graduates in
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 Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Between 2001 and 2006,the former has the
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 percentage of international students
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 with 2006. New Brunswick has been the highest
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 Ontario has been the lowest in both 2001 and 2006.
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 Columbia and Nova Scotia were really close to New Brunswick in 2006,but they were lower by 0,5-2%. Newfoundland and Labrador and Manitoba's
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 were the same in both 2001 and 2006. In 2001 the same situation happened with Alberta and British Columbia. All Canadian provinces have passed 5% of international students in 2006,
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 only 3 out of 8 have passed in 2001. In the
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this
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 illustrates that at the start of
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' the number of international scholars
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 been increasing through the years.
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