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The bar chart illustrates the statics of (Brunswick New , Nova Scotia, Quebec, Alberta, British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, Ontario) International graduates, Canadian University,

The bar chart illustrates the statics of (Brunswick New , Nova Scotia, Quebec, Alberta, British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, Ontario) International graduates, Canadian University,
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 of (Brunswick New , Nova Scotia, Quebec, Alberta, British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, Ontario) International
graduates
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 University, between 2001 and 2006. Units are measured in percentage.
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graduates
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the 2006 good of percentage
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 2001 period
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. The
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postsecondary
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 and
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2006
graduates
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 most of
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their
 New Brunswick
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Ontario.
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expenditure
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 British Columbia. In terms of New Brunswick,
graduates
 of 2006,
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 about 12%, on the opposed is 2001 at 7%.
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Similarly
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expenditure
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 Nova Scotia, Alberta and Quebec than
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2001.
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2006,
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expeditures
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expenditures
 of British Columbia and Ontario (just over
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11% and 6%)
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double
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2001 (which was over
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4% and 3%) . The 2006 was higher on Newfoundland and Labrador and Manitoba than the 2001.
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