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Here is a graph illustrating the shifts in food consumption by Chinese people in the midst of 1985 and 2010.

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Here is a graph illustrating the shifts in food consumption by Chinese people in the midst of 1985 and 2010. In 1985
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the highest-ranking items were fish,
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 followed
salt
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 in second place,and meat in third position.
According to
 the graph, is shown that in 1985, the popularity of meat was the lowest.
However
, by 2010, it had increased and reached the same. We can see that fish
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starting
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 1990,
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fluctuated. Between 1990 and 1995, it decreased significantly, but from 1995 onwards, it began to increase sharply. As is presented in the graph, we conclude 2010, it is evident that in China, the popularity of salt slightly decreased,
while
 the popularity of meat grew. Fish,
on the other hand
, fluctuated for many years but ultimately, as it began, remained the most popular in the country.
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