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employers should focus on personality eather than qualification and experience when choosing someone to work . To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

#employers #focus #personality #eather #qualification #someone #work
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A fair amount of
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people
 insist that companies should pay more attention to the personal
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 of candidates than to their professional competence. I can only partially agree with
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 point of view , because both professional qualifications and personal qualities are equally important for a person to achieve success at
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 will substantiate my point of view To commence with,the competition between companies is intensifying these days.To provide their clients with the best possible results,organisations look for the most talented people.As
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, professional experience is undoubtedly crucial for the hired people.
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 to that, lack of sufficient job knowledge creates inequalities among employees and
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 will result in an overhead for both the company and the worthy candidates.
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, if less skilled people are hired many bright minds miss the
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opportunity
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, companies suffer huge losses when they spend money on unskilled staff.
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,there are several other aspects that are just as important as qualifications.First of all,no one wants to
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 with an unfriendly, selfish and arrogant person who never applauds others for their success.
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, recruiting friendly, transparent and humorous
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 builds harmony in the workplace. To add, they must be dynamic, adaptable and ready to learn new things.
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, if job seekers are less qualified for the job requirements ,
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if they are enthusiastic and have
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 desire to learn, they will undoubtedly be an
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asset
 to the company. Global
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giants
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 as Amazon and Google are conducting interviews known as the leadership principle round , which assesses
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 ability to
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 under pressure and their ability to adapt to
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organisational
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 culture. In
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conclusion, I firmly believe that appropriate academic qualifications and
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 experience help an individual perform to the best of their ability. Personal qualities cannot be ignored ,
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, as teamwork is the norm in most jobs.
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