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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The bar charts illustrated the
graduate
's and postgraduate's direction before they
graduate
 (excluding full-time
work
).
Overall
, the trends of both
graduates
 and postgraduate is basically the same, except more postgraduate tend to do part-time
work
. The numbers of
graduates
 and postgraduates in voluntary
work
,
further
 study and unemployment
is
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 approximately ten times different. The most common way before they
graduate
 from college is
Further
 study, there were 29665
in
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apply
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UK
graduates
 and 2725
in
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apply
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UK
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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, which is nearly 10 times. The number of
graduates
 and postgraduate students in Voluntary
work
 and Unemployment is about 3500 and 345, 16235 and 1625, which getting closer to 10 times. The statistics illustrate that the trends for
graduates
 and postgraduates are quite different. Unlike the previous trends, the percentage of
graduate
 students in Part-time
work
different
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apply
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is more than the previous one, with
UK
 postgraduates(2535) and
UK
graduates
(17735)
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, work, graduates, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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