Should companies and business owners these days act only for money, or should they also care about society? What do you say about it, give examples.

in today's budding age, plenty
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of business
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business
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businesses
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and factories
don't should
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pay attention to only making money.
Although
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this
opinion, I cannot deny the responsibility for society.
that is
why, they
also
should
in
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charge of social responsibilities. In fact, when any type of organization only
will focus
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on earning money,
this
businesslike manner
in
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not bad. So
this
style has many advantages for
company
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companies
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and factories. The large amount making money
result
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which is enough income. We can say that
,
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businesses can be able to sufficient profit when they have
efficient
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plan for growing.
Such
as, many support the view that, always dominant organizations can
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heigh
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high
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salary
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salaries
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for
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employees.
Hence
, speaking personally, companies that can cover their own needs and organizations with large investments can provide social assistance.
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, companies shouldn't run only come in profit because its place
play
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big
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role model in society.
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also
responsible for social responsibilities. How they can help the community.
First,
this
should begin inside the company. If Proprietors and managers will have
a
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good treatment with staffers, affection appears among employees and employers. It's commitment too.
Besides
,
charity
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a charity
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for poor people and
invest
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for
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in
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nature protection
also
are helping
for
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society, which,
one
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of
best
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the best
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ways.
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, organizations can be more popular by alms and donations.
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, to my way of thinking, when every business
will work
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through the ideas listed above, only
then
can they achieve their goal.
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