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The graph illustrates the incerase in population of 3 cities in the U.S. state Oregon between 1940-2000.

The graph illustrates the incerase in population of 3 cities in the U.S. state Oregon between 1940-2000.
The graph illustrates the
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increase
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population
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the population
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 of 3 cities in the U.S. state
Oregon
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of Oregon
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 between 1940-2000. All three lines experienced an upward tendency,where the highest
population
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 was recorded in Washington.Between 1940-1970, the
population
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 in Washington
has risen
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rose
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 gradually
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 about 45000 people,
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however
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 there was a sharp climb,
the
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 number of citizens doubled in the following 30 years. By 1970 Yamhill s
population
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 had risen
for
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to
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 only 15000, which is in fact an increase of
approxiamately
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approximately
 50 %.
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 to that in Columbia in
these period
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 of time
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population
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the population
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also
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 rose: from 30000 to under 36000.In
comparision
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comparison
 with these 2 cities,the biggest development was shown by Washington. In the following 3 decades In Yamhill and Columbia
population
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 increased
for
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by
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 the same amount
about
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30000
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30,000
 people.Between 1940-2000
population
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in
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of
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 Yamhill tripled from 30000 to 90000.
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 In 2000
Columbias
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Columbia's
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population
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approximately
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was approxiamately
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approxiamately
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approximately
 75000 triple what it had been in 1940

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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