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Nowadays there are a large number of coffee shops and fastfood vendors on high streets and in town centres. Why are there so many of these outlets? What effect is this having on the society?

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The food industry over the past few years has grown large. Resulting in an increase in the number of cafes and street food hubs. Through the following
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 the causes of
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 rise and its impact on today's society will be discussed. To start with
coffee
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 shops sector every age of people
love
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 to drink
coffee
due to
this
 high demand
on
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coffee
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 sector.
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, in
coffee
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the coffee
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 itself
lovemany
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love many
variets
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varieties
 as been created like thickness in the
coffee
 and young
peoples
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 spot nowadays, is
coffee
 shop current generation and old peoples in
coffee
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 shop early morning.
Furthermore
, these retails are becoming hangout spots for teenagers and young adults,
as well as
, common places for reunions and for
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 meetings to be held.
Secondly
, fast-food many of them
addicted
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 towards
this
 because of the taste and the young
generation
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 saviour is
fast-food
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fast food
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 by
this
persons
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person's
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 health will be damaged and
life
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their life
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 span will be decreased
according
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 how we eat because the products
while
 cooking
is
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are
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unhyginic
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unhygienic
 but many of them eating and side effects will
happens
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 in small age but many of them go to that kind of restaurant only because
human
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 mentality is that. Many of
them
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 love
towards
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junk food
was
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immense
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 current generation I conclude, that because of the demand in the market
of
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for
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coffee
 shops and
fastfoods
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fast
 in public these shops are rising
by
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because
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this
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apply
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everyone can eat with
the
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a
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 limit
it
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as
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because
its
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 not fair to do
this
everyday
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