The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years

The pie charts below show the devices  people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different  years
These two pie charts compare the six categories of devices
people
in
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the
age
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of 18 to 25 use to watch
television
in Canada in the years
of
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2009 and 2019.
According to
the pie charts, most
people
in Canada watched
television
using conventional TV in 2009.
However
, in the next 10 years, in terms of flat-screen
tv
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, the number of
people
using
this
device adds up to 27%, making it the most popular device.
Furthermore
, the use of conventional
television
rapidly declined from 34% to 4% during 10 years. The same thing occurs
to
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the laptop category, going from 20% which
then
decreased to 12% of the total number.
On the other hand
, the number of
people
using tablets to enjoy
television
programs increased from 5% to 19%.
This
huge increase
also
happens to the rate of the flat-screen TV category, starting from 8% and ending up at 27%.
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