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The bar chart below shows the number of men and women attending various evening course at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

The bar chart below shows the number of men and women attending various evening course at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
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The supplied bar graph illustrates the figure of
men
 and
women
 attending four different evening
courses
 (drama, painting, sculpture, and language) at an adult education centre in a particular year (2019),
while
 the pie chart represents the ages of
participants
 who enrolled in the mentioned
courses
.
Overall
,
men
 preferred joining painting
courses
,
whereas
women
 preferred language
courses
 the most.
Moreover
, a majority of
participants
 who enrolled in the centre were 50 years and above. Regarding language
courses
, the number of
women
 who enrolled in
this
 course was exactly 40 people which was 20 times higher than
men
.
Similarly
, in terms of painting, the number of
women
 who took
this
 course was higher compared to
men
 by 5 times. In terms of drama, more
women
 registered for the course compared to
women
 at 20 and 10 respectively.
In contrast
, the number of male students who took sculpture was 5 times more than
women
. By looking at the pie chart, it can be seen that less than half of the
participants
 (42%) who enrolled in the centre were 50 years old and above.
Participants
 whose ages were between 40-49 years accounted for more than a quarter (26%). The rate of students whose ages were between 20—29, and 30-39 were around 11% and 15% respectively. The lowest age of enrollment was
participants
 whose age was under 20.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, courses, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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