The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph illustrates the changes in the sum of
Catholics
from six
countries
: China, India ,Philippines,Vietnam, Korea and Japan ,between 2010 and 2013.
Overall
, in both periods, the Philippines was the country with the biggest
number
of
Catholics
,
while
Japan was the one with the least
number
.
While
some
countries
encountered a decrease in the amount of
Catholic
individuals , others encountered an increase.
Firstly
, starting with
countries
that have had a decrease, the Philippines started with over 75 million
Catholics
in 2010,
this
number
became only 72 million in 2013.
However
,
this
country was the one with the highest
number
of
Catholics
in both given periods.Korea has had the biggest change in digit of
Catholics
, having more than 5 million in 2010, and only a bit over 1,000,000 in 2013.
Also
, Vietnam has had a small decrease in the digit of the
Catholic
population.
Secondly
, continuing with the
countries
that have encountered an increase in the
Catholic
population, China started from 9,000,000 in 2013
,
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and grew to 15,000,000 in 2013.India has had the biggest increase in
Catholic
citizens' figure, being over 10,500,000 in 2010, and increasing to 19,000,000 in 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words catholics, countries, number, catholic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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