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The charts below give information about the sources of water in the world and what it is used for in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the sources of water in the world and what it is used for in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give information about the percentage of total
world
water
 and total freshwater sources, and the bar
chart
 indicates the consumption of
water
 in 3 different categories.
Overall
, it is important to note that the most amount of total
world
water
 is saline and frozen
water
 is the main source of fresh
water
.
Also
,It is readily apparent from the bar
chart
 that
while
 agriculture the the main consumer of fresh
water
 in
Saudi
Arabia
 and
Egypt
,
this
 category experienced a gradual decline in the case of
Canada
.
According to
 the
world
water
 pie charts,only 2.50 %of total
world
water
 is fresh
while
 97.50% is saline. Moving to the Freshwater pie
chart
, frozen
water
(glaciers and permanent snow) involves roughly three times more
water
 than the underground
water
 category.
Moreover
,the proportion of
water
 decreased sharply to .90% and .30% in underground ice and renewable
water
 respectively. In terms of the bar
chart
, agriculture uses the most amount of
water
 in
Saudi
Arabia
 and
Egypt
, a half and around two-fifths respectively.
However
,
this
 category experiences a progressive reduction to 30% in
Canada
. Turning next to industry, it is the main
water
 consumer in
Canada
, which accounts for approximately 45%.
On the other hand
, the proportion of
water
 usage falls steeply to roughly 18% and 5% in
Saudi
Arabia
 and
Egypt
 respectively. Regarding domestic use,
although
 it uses the least amount of
water
 in
Canada
 and
Saudi
Arabia
, it reaches a record of 10% in
Egypt
.
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