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The charts below give information about the sources of water in the world and what it is used for in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the sources of water in the world and what it is used for in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give information about the percentage of total
world
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water
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 and total freshwater sources, and the bar
chart
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 indicates the consumption of
water
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 in 3 different categories.
Overall
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, it is important to note that the most amount of total
world
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water
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 is saline and frozen
water
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 is the main source of fresh
water
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.
Also
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,It is readily apparent from the bar
chart
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 that
while
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 agriculture the the main consumer of fresh
water
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 in
Saudi
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Arabia
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 and
Egypt
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,
this
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 category experienced a gradual decline in the case of
Canada
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.
According to
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 the
world
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water
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 pie charts,only 2.50 %of total
world
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water
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 is fresh
while
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 97.50% is saline. Moving to the Freshwater pie
chart
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, frozen
water
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(glaciers and permanent snow) involves roughly three times more
water
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 than the underground
water
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 category.
Moreover
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,the proportion of
water
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 decreased sharply to .90% and .30% in underground ice and renewable
water
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 respectively. In terms of the bar
chart
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, agriculture uses the most amount of
water
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 in
Saudi
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Arabia
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 and
Egypt
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, a half and around two-fifths respectively.
However
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,
this
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 category experiences a progressive reduction to 30% in
Canada
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. Turning next to industry, it is the main
water
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 consumer in
Canada
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, which accounts for approximately 45%.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of
water
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 usage falls steeply to roughly 18% and 5% in
Saudi
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Arabia
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 and
Egypt
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 respectively. Regarding domestic use,
although
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 it uses the least amount of
water
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 in
Canada
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 and
Saudi
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Arabia
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, it reaches a record of 10% in
Egypt
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, water, chart, saudi, arabia, egypt, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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