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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others belive that the purpose of museums is to educate.

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In modern life, it is believed that some individuals have different views about the function of museums. In my personal view, building can and should play a role in both educating and entertaining. On the one hand first and most important thing , it can be argued that the main role of a museum is to educate.foundation
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 a huge number of historical records and ancient objects, which is used to broaden objects, which is used to broaden society's knowledge of previous events, human history or the world in the future. In
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 can play an important role in teaching
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 about history, culture,science,technology and many other aspects of life .
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, many
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 think that
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are tourist attractions and entertaining places.Some institution related to art , nature or technology
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 exhibiting a great
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 of interesting things that
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 want to see. In order to attract more visitors and diminish their boredom.
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 have taken advantage of advantaged technology to make their exhibitions become vivid.
To sum up
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 essay discussed the main positive and negative sides. In my opinion exhibitions in the museum are appropriate if they are educational because most young public are interested in history.
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