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Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In
contemporary
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rapid
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 changing world, a vast majority of individuals are going to
city
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the city
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 and
live
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living
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 in high-rise
building
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buildings
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. Some people claim that staying in
tall
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a tall
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 building has a number of drawbacks
such
 as it makes them unhappy and lonely
while
counterparts
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their counterparts
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 argue that it has several parks.
this
 essay will delve deeper
both
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into both
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 these views,
analysis
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analysing
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 their benefits and drawbacks,
presenting
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and present
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 arguments and examples to
provides
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provide
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 a comprehensive analysis.
To begin
 with, there are various advantages
on
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 living in high-rise apartments.
Firstly
, individuals who are social
person
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people
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 feel alone and sad because they are almost isolated from society. In
addion
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addition
, they can not get an opportunity to interact with
neighbour
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neighbours
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 and spend
times
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time
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.
Furthermore
, they can not be a social person and contribute to societal well-being.
Consequently
, people are feeling more lazy, unsocial, lonely, and sad.
Conversely
, there are
also
 various advantages. first of all, a community
who
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that
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consider
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considers
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 safety
likely
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is likely
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 to live in that type of place. It offers more
secure
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security
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 and peace to live.
Moreover
, individuals get a chance to spend precious time with their families
that
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which
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 creates strong bonding with family members,
brings
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and brings
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tranquility
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in
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to
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 families, and
overall
 well-being. In conclusion, though living in
tall
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the tall
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building
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buildings
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 has some pros and cons, a huge number of
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the community
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community
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communities
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 prefer to go to
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the suburb
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suburb
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suburbs
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 and
staying
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stay
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 in
the
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an
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 apartment. Ultimately, they obtain nearly every opportunity to stay there
although
 they know that staying alone makes them
unhappiness
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unhappy
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