Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In
contemporary
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rapid
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changing world, a vast majority of individuals are going to
city
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the city
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and
live
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in high-rise
building
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buildings
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. Some people claim that staying in
tall
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building has a number of drawbacks
such
as it makes them unhappy and lonely
while
counterparts
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argue that it has several parks.
this
essay will delve deeper
both
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these views,
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their benefits and drawbacks,
presenting
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and present
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arguments and examples to
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a comprehensive analysis.
To begin
with, there are various advantages
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living in high-rise apartments.
Firstly
, individuals who are social
person
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people
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feel alone and sad because they are almost isolated from society. In
addion
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addition
, they can not get an opportunity to interact with
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and spend
times
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time
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.
Furthermore
, they can not be a social person and contribute to societal well-being.
Consequently
, people are feeling more lazy, unsocial, lonely, and sad.
Conversely
, there are
also
various advantages. first of all, a community
who
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consider
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considers
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safety
likely
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to live in that type of place. It offers more
secure
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and peace to live.
Moreover
, individuals get a chance to spend precious time with their families
that
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creates strong bonding with family members,
brings
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and brings
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tranquility
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in
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families, and
overall
well-being. In conclusion, though living in
tall
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building
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buildings
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has some pros and cons, a huge number of
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the community
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community
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communities
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prefer to go to
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the suburb
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suburb
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suburbs
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and
staying
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in
the
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apartment. Ultimately, they obtain nearly every opportunity to stay there
although
they know that staying alone makes them
unhappiness
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