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Nowadays culture is much the same all around the world when compared to previous times. Do you think this a positive or negative development

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In
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 contemporary era, numerous nations
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 almost
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 cultural properties compared with previous decades . I am of the belief that
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 is a negative thing to be considered
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 because each country has to have a unique type of culture.
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 that nation will be similar to others.
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, currently,
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globalization many countries have been sharing similar cultural values and
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, in turn, causes a gradual loss in the traditional cultural values which used to distinguish one nation from another.
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 can be exemplified by an article published in Time Magazine which claimed that the internet is the main culprit that leads to a significant decrease in the uniqueness of societies. What can be said here is that
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cultural discrimination amongst nations is what makes each one special in its own way, and
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 will add an important value to the world by increasing the cultural diversity between peoples.
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, losing the cultural identity will have a detrimental impact on the psychological
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 of the individuals. To illustrate, each society has its own traditions that make
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 the general populace proud of it and seek to spread it globally
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 pass it on to their offspring .
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, diminishing
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this
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 valuable meaning of life might have a negative effect on the mental state of individuals.
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, future generations could suffer from some personality problems
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important cultural merits.
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 that the similarities between nations
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 an ongoing issue and
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 will
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 a world
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 uniqueness.
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